The Pick Up Line

[Andrea Vestrand]

"I'm already horizontal" was all she needed to text and he was at her doorstep.  For pick up lines, it's not the most creative but certainly got the job done.  She knew this -- getting men into her bed was easy -- finding one she wanted to keep there, that was the difficult part.  Don't get me wrong, she never said she had trouble climaxing.  But after the 4th or 5th time, she wondered to herself how long she would need to cordially attempt to get his whiskey dick off before she could politely kick him out of her house.  For despite the awkward ending, a fleshy warm cock will always beat a cold latex one.

[Brittany]

I like the tone of this a lot.

Even though I disagree with the final statement, it's a lonely and powerful one.

[Sandy P]

I'm with Sandra and Ron '"Amen to that." Nice Writing, Andrea.

[Sandra Davies]

Just on the last ten words I was going to say 'Amen to that'  until I saw Ron had already said it ...

[Robert Crisman]

I liked this one, especially whiskey dick. I'd suggest that you change the beginning of the last sentence to "Nonetheless, despite the awkward ending..."  because as it stands the sense the last two sentences impart is: She wanted to kick him out of her house...because...a warm fleshy cock will always beat a cold latex one. Which is true, I imagine, and, seeing as she got off four or five times, she actually didn't do too bad at all with this guy.

[Bill Floyd]

Yes, that text would do it.  This story kinda does it, too.  Except for that nagging sense of emptiness, her growing bored with them once she's got hers.  Of course, any man who critiques a woman for being a selfish lover is probably kinda hypocritical.  Now I'm blathering, too.

[Pearl Hadley]

I like the way you use 'despite the awkward ending' when obviously this isint happily ever after. Why whiskey? (Intoxicating,burning?)

[Ron. Lavalette]

Amen to that....to something, anyway.  If somebody yexted that line to me I,too, would be there in a flash.

Hot six. And insightful. I'm blathering.  Sorry.