She stopped me as I rushed to work, her cool wrinkled hand lightly touching my shoulder, "You're going about this all wrong," she said with ragged vocal cords at least three times my age.

Shocked at the sudden image in mind of my current failing relationship, the job I hated and the baby I'd just killed in a sterile setting, I waited for more.

"Listen to your heart, slow down, choose as if everything matters. You have time, but none to waste."

She took her hand from my shoulder and shuffled away, her essence the hunched broken soul of regret.

I stepped away quickly in the opposite direction but turned to look once more at the woman whose eyes had pulled me into a plea to change her destiny, her sad lined face my unwanted future.

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Comment by Sandra Davies on March 10, 2010 at 5:52am
I experienced a variation of this scene for which I've been forever grateful - regrettably it is impossble both to identify a catalytic moment and to predetermine its life-changing effect on others.
How succinctly you made this point here.
Comment by Teresa on March 9, 2010 at 10:27pm
This says so much in so little which is the point of 6S, ha. I'm still learning this "point". I'm also learning to follow your old woman's words. It's one thing to know something intellectually and quite another to put it into practice. Hard lessons taught in a sharp 6.
Comment by Jeanette Cheezum on March 9, 2010 at 9:54pm
Heartfelt.
Comment by Joe Gensle on March 9, 2010 at 1:28pm
I hadda read this twice, and I'll use a word cheapened by excess: deep. It's deep and good, and substantive enough to have warranted my revisit. Best, it was worth it! Great VI!

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