Midnight Trains and the Orphaned Cello 2

[Brittany]

Chloe-

There's $2.25 on the table between us on a Friday morning at this dingy diner which is located at the base of the train stop, just a few blocks away from my apartment. I'm making clover patterns on the cracked linoleum surface with various tendered coins because I can't hold his gaze as it is too intense, and I am still feeling too newly broken. Copious cups of coffee and lustful thoughts have aerated my heart and opened my pores to his warmth and the heat of impulsivity.

Alé-

Her cheeks are blushed and cherubic as she fights to notice how much I want her. Her body appears blanched and dormant beneath the layers of cotton and cashmere that allot only a peek of her décolletage which exposes several beauty marks that seem to have the shape of Orion, minus his belt. I know that she must think that I am helplessly, wantonly, fixated on her breasts but, on the contrary, I can only faintly hear her voice from inside of me as I am dizzily dreaming of what to play so that the notes may instead dance for me and move her to the rhythm of my seduction.

They met here...

http://sixsentences.ning.com/profiles/blogs/midnight-trains-and-the...

[Brittany]

so I've changed it and it seems to work now. thanks :)

[Brittany]

@Mike, not sure what I did ;) but it downloads the first piece that I wrote, instead of taking you to it. I used the attachment icon listed at the top of the draft section. Thanks for the comments. These two have a great story I think...

[Mike Handley]

Well done, Britt. The link didn't work for me, though (unless you mean they met at 6S).

[Toby Tucker Hecht]

I loved that he was so enraptured that he could "only faintly hear her voice from inside of" him, as though he had enfolded her into his body already.

[Angela]

I love the aerated heart and the constellation of beauty marks.  Their inability to communicate ("can't hold his gaze", "faintly hear her voice") is in itself something that speaks.  Lovely.

[Bill Floyd]

Oo la la.  The images are deftly chosen.  "I am still feeling too newly broken..." Ain't that love?

[Robert Crisman]

Oh yeah... I've never read anything so convincingly written from both sides. "The rhythm of my seduction." Love it. Fave.

[Teresa]

I'm hot and they haven't even touched.  Only clever writing can do that.

[bolton carley]

aerated my heart and marks of orion minus his belt.  great details.