Love Song

[Adam Fine]

“He’s a nineteen-year-old, writing as a middle-aged man musing on his final, pitiful years,” I explain to her, my enthusiasm exposing the near-reverence I feel for the piece. She tells me flatly, “It sounds conceited.” I notice a marked conciseness in both her questions and comments, which I disdain and respect in equal parts. “But that’s just it,” I press on; “He pulls it off perfectly.” As she rolls her eyes I think about the abstinence of all things carnal and fleshly the universe has imposed upon me for the past two years. I take her phone number, handwritten on the neatly creased paper, and furtively place it behind me on the bench.

Adam Fine is an artist based in Dallas, Texas, though he never exhibits there.

This is my first post, having just discovered this wonderful network through a very good friend. Thank you for reading.

[Adam Fine]

Thank you for all of your comments! Actually, Michael, you weren't far off from what actually happened, but a magician never explains his tricks. Thank you.

[Michael Brown]

It's terrific the way you let us know a lot of things are hitting you at once. You haven't convinced me the way you've described the details of your interaction with her that you would resign so easily and leave her number on the bench. I think you took a look at it and memorized it before placing it behind you. You write like a wizard. I look forward to more.

[Brittany]

great debut!
I actually like the way you have used disdain and respect. Love the positive/ negative feel to it. Nice mix of social experience and personal attachment to one's work.

[Sandra Davies]

Hope you mean to go on as you've started - thoroughly enjoyable and I especially enjoyed the 'marked conciseness'.

[Bernard S. Jansen]

This hints at a lot of more, which is what a good six does. I'm not sure how you disdain and respect in equal parts, but it didn't distract me too badly. Welcome to the club. Have a look around, and don't forget to read other sixes and post lots of comments. People post here for comments. Whether you say, "You're a genius" or "I don't like this.", people like to know they've been read and responded to. I comment on pretty much everything I read, though I type fast and tend to shoot off at the mouth. Have a nice stay.

[Adam Fine]

Thank you so much, Elliott. I've not put my writing out for others to see for so long.

[Elliott Cox]

That's a great 6 debut, Adam. Beautifully written.