Like a Carrier Pigeon with One Short Wing

[David Brown]

I have already filled my breaking bookshelves with my modest library. I have already put away my few plates and glasses. I instinctively know my new commute complete with shortcuts and speedtrap hotspots. I have already made a new name for myself in my new office with my new bosses. I have set aside all the little pieces of nostalgia, hung my pictures, and ground in a new habit of leaving my keys by the front door just like I used to do when I lived with you. I have made all the motions of moving except moving on.

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Some days, I miss you less, some days more. I don't ever feel like I miss you less - just that on the days that I miss you more, I miss you so much more. That is the difference. You said the distance would get easier in time. The distance isn't any easier. It is just easier to distinguish.

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So I sip whiskey in fresh sheets in low lights and listen to MC5. I smoke a little tree. I lay back and wait to fall asleep. If not sleep, then I wait for your call. Sometimes sleep comes quickly. Sometimes the call does not come at all.

[Jeanette Cheezum]

I liked the way this played out.

[David Brown]

thank you, everyone. Judy, i'll take your criticism. I don't like to overdo word use, but it is a solitary thing. But yes, "my" is in there an awful lot. Angela, thank you, it is always a pleasure to hear from you. I apologize for not commenting so much. I do look for your pieces whenever I visit 6s. Thank you, kaylynn, i'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Kaylynn Phillips-Temple]

I think this is an excellent piece. Keep up the good work!

[Angela]

Resonates, perhaps universally.  Except for the whiskey and the tree.  Which maybe makes it harder, maybe not.  Fine job.  I thought "my" in the first section was appropriate to drive home the fact that there is no "our".

[Judy Thompson]

except for the overuse of 'my'  in the first paragraph, this is wonderful in a sad way. the second paragraph is a stunner, and an absolutely perfect description.  and this:

 I have made all the motions of moving except moving on.