Have I told you the story

[Travis Smith]

Have I told you the story?

 

The one that began when you took my heart in your hand, and ends in forever with that hand in mine, the two of us walking with souls intertwined.

 

No,  maybe not.

 

It could have been wonderful, if another man's war in a different man's land, hadn't ended my part, before that beautiful walk began.

 

I am still here my love, watching and listening, as your story goes on, without me in it.

 

After forever, if you find me again, I promise to tell you the story, beginning to end. 

[Michael Brown]

Had to come back, read this again, and take note of what others remarked.

You see what Cita said? And Bill? And the others? It's true!

[Dorothy Hoffman]

I love the simple poetry of this love story. The final line is especially powerful.

[bolton carley]

very poetic and great voice.   old thoughts are creeping out, aren't they now?

[Cita]

Whoa.... Travis!!!  Where have you been hiding my friend?

[Bill Floyd]

Wow, this is a new peak for you.  Moving, thoughtful, and concise.

[Michael Brown]

Oh, man, this is sad. Beautifully written, but really sad. Looks as if "doing the right thing" doesn't always wind up being the best thing. And that little, "No, maybe not." lifts this from memorable to perfection.

[Teresa]

This has many messages in it, not just about love and soul mates and what might have been, but about what senseless war does to futures and dreams.  There are questions here also and the sort of magic I try not to believe in but... sometimes I get weak.  I don't mind so much.  Gorgeous.

[Kristine_ES]

i realied liked "after forever"

there's a lot going on in this one that needs more saying.