What can YOU say in six sentences?
He goes to Sweet Scoops over on the green because he believes that the ice cream is colder there than over at Tim & Doug’s by The Pick And Shovel, and it must be that others believe it, too, because the business there is always brisk, the lines twice as long, even on rainy days, even on Tuesdays or days it’s just too damned hot to give a second thought about where the ice cream comes from as long as it’s frozen and sweet.
It never occurs to him that maybe people go there just because they can eat their sundaes under the maples that shade more than half the green, sighing in even the slightest breeze, or the fact that Tim & Doug’s is surrounded by parking lot, and mothers would rather let their kids run around on grass, or that lovers would prefer a spot that lets them slip away into the park after they’ve finished off their cones.
He hasn’t considered that the greater volume of business at Sweet Scoops allows them to charge less per sundae, even while heaping on twice as much whipped cream as Tim & Doug’s can offer.
Nor has he considered the relative attractiveness of each establishment’s servers.
None of this occurs to him. He’s been telling himself—and everybody else—that Sweet Scoops has the coldest ice cream in town for so long now, he’s come to believe it himself.
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Comment by Mike Handley on June 13, 2012 at 7:33pm Nicely rendered, Ron. We all scream ...
Comment by Gita on June 13, 2012 at 6:56pm This one is not too warm, not too cold. It's just right. You make me crave a store surrounded by a park where one can sit outdoors and enjoy whatever it is -- coffee, sandwich, ice cream.. I hope there really is such a place in your world.
Comment by Angela on June 13, 2012 at 6:53pm Makes me wonder what differences and similarities I ignore....good six.
Ah, you do make me smile. Nicely done, Mr. Lavalette.
Comment by Bill Floyd on June 13, 2012 at 10:24am "Fine-tuned" is right. I love an internal monologue where the speaker knows more than he thinks he knows.
Comment by Robert Crisman on June 12, 2012 at 11:37pm Nicely done.
Adorable fine-tuned post, and Travis is right -- it's all about perception. I'm fifty-fifty on comparison shopping. And I remember the pictures and colors on the labels, not the words, so when packages change......
Comment by Travis Smith on June 12, 2012 at 10:03pm The beauty of perception...for him it is just ice cream - which sounds good right about now....
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