A Halloween Story: No Outlet

[Jamie Hogan]

Flythe sprinted through the echo of his roar, the burlap sack on his head flapping like a sail, Theo and Laura breaking right and upstairs and Burke breaking left with Flythe bearing down.

Along a short hallway and into a kitchen skinned of countertops and doors, cabinet frames bare grey in the bonelight, his breathing in his head like the pumping of a great steam engine and a monster's sweaty breath on the back of his neck. A sharp left and onto the subflooring where berber would have been and it was a master bedroom, wide with a tray ceiling above and beer cans about and a blanket wadded in the corner and no outlet.

"I saw you walking around here yesterday," Flythe stopped in the doorway and leaned against the frame and took in the room like a john perusing the lobby of a brothel.

Burke shook, but he stared straight into the buttons on the sack and did not blink, "He's my brother."

"Out-fucking-standing."

[Cita]

...took in the room like a john perusing the lobby of a brothel.  Oh, man.  I hate this story. I love this story.  I am so creeped out.

[Kristine_ES]

yeah... bonelight got me too. i had to stop reading and LINGER on that word, for a long time.  bonelight is a whole darn poem by itself!

[bolton carley]

lol, bill floyd!  no one needs a john-like look in the room! :)

[Bill Floyd]

The chase is on.  The image of the sack "flapping like a sail" and Flythe's john-like perusal of the room are even creeping ME out.   

[Angela]

"Bonelight" is the official word of the month in my personal lexicon of pilfered creative language.  The whole second section gave me such a feeling of malevolent neglect (with respect to the surroundings).  Still loving this series.

[bolton carley]

i'm with gita, but the pumping steam engine breathing was amazing, too.  and you know how i love dialogue even when it's creepy.  but you know i love cussing. lol.  brilliant as always.

[Gita]

You killed me with "in the bonelight" and then really killed with  "Out-fucking-standing."  THIS IS HUGE!!!!

(You know whose voice I heard right there? Christopher Walken's.)