To The Man I Saw Long Ago in a Railroad Station

[Gita]

Let's say for a moment that we met on a train crossing Saskatchewan and you brushed past me in one of those narrow passageways with windows that looked out on rushing wheat.

And let's say that you wore a soft grey fedora and I a light blue dress and you said "Pardon me," in a western drawl at the moment the train entered a tunnel.

And then, what if I lost my bearings in the dark and you steadied me and we laughed, and when the train broke free into the light you saw my smile and asked me if I would join you in the club car?

What if that was how it started, both of us in forward motion, glancing at the sunlit grain and cattle, holding onto square highball glasses, rocking gently on the rails?
Would you have turned out to be a poet or a handler of horses?

Would we have ended up together in a tall, white house west of the Rockies instead of marrying two other people who keep us strangers?

 

[Cita]

I have to echo what Mike said.  You did leave your box and your normal voice.  This one feels like a river that has been running deep inside of you.  Curious as to how long it took you to write this.  I would hazard the guess that it wasn't long.  It flowed from you, didn't it?  Thank you for not editing the life out of it either!  Faved.  

[Ron. Lavalette]

Oh, the rcoking, the tunnel, the coming into the light.  The train.  Beautiful.

 

What if everybody could write like this?

[Brittany]

mad love for this, G.

[Jadie Jones]

what bittersweet regret and longing. beautifully wistful. favorited.

[Wendy]

I like everything about this one.

[Toby Tucker Hecht]

The fedora is a wonderful touch.  Weeks from now I will remember that.

[Robert Crisman]

Nicely done. Trains are great for that.

[Paul de Denus]

I liked the sway of this, a nice romantic vision- having travelled that train across Saskatchewan (in my 20') this brought back that fantasy feel as well as that wonderful train experience and movement-

[Teresa]

@Sandra ~ Teehee...  So do I.

@Gita ~ You better be careful or I'll bite you in October.  So when are you going to write about that?  Huh?

[Mike Handley]

You left your box on this one, and it worked splendidly.