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Marvin decided to look at the stars and was surprised to see the moon was still up; he felt he had been there for many days, visiting something dead.
He could not stop himself from sobbing as he thought of how he and Frank would fill each other in a kind of tender desperation and then cry as they tried to figure out what to do; then there would be endless nearly violent and grasping kissing, followed by serious planning to change their lives, to be together - and it went on torturously for months.
He felt the memory of their sweet misery like a cramp in his throat, and then he felt the softness of the cool air, like it had been in the previous October, when Marvin cleaned out the attic and the garage in the hope of making his move away from Elizabeth a little less lengthy and complicated, taking odd paint cans to the recycling center and feeling freer with every trip.
Marvin’s palms grew clammy around the handle of the gun as he thought of the insane chances they took by meeting in a vacant parking lot behind the Baptist church repeatedly, and also in Magnolia Antiques, where they christened all the dusty sofas and a number of Persian rugs valued at thousands of dollars.
They traded ridiculous remembrances, key rings, bags of M&Ms, worn out teeshirts to hide in unlikely places and Marvin remembered every pocket he had hidden them in one by one. They even ate food from each other’s mouths; it was as if they fed something in each other that Marvin began to feel could never be satisfied.
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Comment by Stephen Torelli on May 27, 2012 at 12:49am Your writing skill shines.
Comment by Angela on May 26, 2012 at 10:34pm Hi Harry. I think this is the twenty-fifth episode. Marvin is a vintage and antique book appraiser at Magnolia, which explains their access (after hours).
It is very mutual.
Please continue to stay with, all is about to wrap up in I think three-four posts.
Comment by Harry on May 26, 2012 at 9:27pm I'm with Robert I think. It sounds like it was mutual, so why is Marvin in a tree stand with a gun in his mouth?
I meant to note in part 1 that it sounds like you know your way around a hardware store operation. Realistic details. How is it that they have access to Magnolia Antiques? I'm guessing the christenings did not take place during store hours, but maybe.
Part 3?
Comment by Robert Crisman on May 26, 2012 at 3:48pm It sounds to me like Frank was a lot more than just a horndog. And it that's the case, what scared him away?
Comment by Mike Handley on May 26, 2012 at 9:36am Excellent
Comment by Gita on May 25, 2012 at 9:42pm And of course the secrecy and taboo make it all even more delicious. The forbidden is the emphatic... and the recovery afterwards is not just from the loss of love but also from the loss of that aphrodisiac. No one can easily spring back when that elixir is lost. You have drawn your character's situation to win maximum reader support because anyone who has been there knows how awful it is.
You hit it. I could feel them both in this. And I'm almost envious that I've never fully experienced this wild off-label sort of love, the "could never be satisfied" depths of taboo.
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