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What can YOU say in six sentences?
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"I want to see the world," the girl with the charcoal black eyes whispered.
"I traveled around the world," the man with a slightly worn out black eyes answered.
To every "I want to..." that the girl presents, the man covers with "I've already been..." comments.
He lives in the past.
I, the future.
And together, we'd miss the present.
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Comment by May Thu on January 9, 2012 at 9:33pm -
Thank you and I'm really glad to be a part of 6S.
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Comment by Angela on January 9, 2012 at 6:19pm -
Wise woman. Good to have you on board. Must agree with Ron about the use of "the girl", and then "I".
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Comment by Ron. Lavalette on January 9, 2012 at 10:57am -
A most auspicious debut. Welcome. I really enjoyed the quick-cut contrasts in this piece, & the shift from "the girl" to "I". Well done.
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Comment by Javed Baloch on January 9, 2012 at 3:01am
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We are always missing the present, ... always.
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Comment by May Thu on January 9, 2012 at 2:03am
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there's a difference.
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Comment by Abhi Kantamneni on January 9, 2012 at 1:56am -
Blacked out eyes = Batman?
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