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Mariel Herbert commented on Gita's blog post Overheard in My Kitchen"Funny. I like the dialogue format."
Mariel Herbert commented on Mariel Herbert's blog post Blue"Thank you to everyone who read and commented on "Blue." I appreciate the feedback. And thank you for the kind welcome, too."
Mariel Herbert commented on Norman Ublies's blog post Shocking Events"A beginning that grabs the reader, followed by accessible mundane something; then that ending! I hope you continue soon."
Mariel Herbert commented on Teresa's blog post Road"The last line nailed it. You captured the anxiety that is almost normal in society--"these days.""
Mariel Herbert commented on Jamie Hogan's blog post Close Call"It is nice to remember that vampires are a metaphor. And I keep wondering what the alternate ending would be for this one. Thanks for posting."
Mariel Herbert commented on Toby Tucker Hecht's blog post The Last May"I appreciate the narrator's reasoning: very personal and universal in scope. Lovely piece."
Mariel Herbert commented on Jeanette Cheezum's blog post Entrepreneur"The last line really made the whole piece work."
Mariel Herbert commented on Bill Floyd's blog post Scot Free"You managed to say the perfect amount in so few words. I especially liked "hair tickling his ear," which is an image usually associated with pleasant memories."
Mariel Herbert commented on Paul de Denus's blog post Sobriquet"This one's fun. It moves well and makes me want to read the whole story."
Mariel Herbert commented on Angela's blog post Death's Great Idea"The final thought made me smile. And I like the female personification--makes a psychopomp more personal--and it fit your/the voice."
Norman Ublies commented on Mariel Herbert's blog post Blue"The second sentence was my favorite. It didn't mention the room she was in, but I was there; singing loudly (and off key) with her as she swayed back and forth, clutching her thickening waist. "
Jamie Hogan commented on Mariel Herbert's blog post Blue"Like others have said, the imagery is outstanding. And no cursory or frivolous words, either. A terrific piece of writing."
"Really liked some of the images: songs dripping from the walls, and home cooking on fine china smile. Very original. I guess the title is a state of mind rather than a color."
Angela commented on Mariel Herbert's blog post Blue"Interesting images, and like Bill F said, tight."
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- Mariel finds used bookstores through Brownian motion. She enjoys senryu, symphonies, and Space Westerns.
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Blue
Posted on June 2, 2011 at 12:40am 10 Comments 0 Favorites
Ben left for Kuwait before Linda knew for sure. She spent her summertime singing songs from old records--until they dripped from the walls. She held polite conversations with her midsection while wearing her grandmother’s pearls. "Baby, be born with style and substance. And grow up to look like your father, with his home-cooking-on-fine-china smile." Linda decided to paint the nursery buttercup yellow.
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