Left a comment on 6S, but will gladly expand upon it, as your 6S kept popping int my head while out running errands.
The attention to detail without getting excessively wordy or, dare I say it - poetic was fantastic. You clearly wrote for all the senses, which makes it more vivid for the reader (or at least this one).
I also dig how each sentence, in some manner, marks the passing of time - drops become puddles, footprints fade, air turns cool, aromas linger. This is a very nice technique, and subtly ties the composition together.