New 6S Contribution

[Toby Tucker Hecht]

I have a new Six Sentence contribution today (1/7/09) entitled, "Puddle" on www.sixsentences.blogspot.com. I would appreciate your comments. Thanks!

[Robert McEvily]

"Only the puddle on the floor remained to mark a life together gone bad. That would take a bit longer to evaporate."

Excellent closing.

[Robert McEvily]

Check out Toby's "Aphrodisiac" here.

[Trevor Mcpherson]

Left a comment on 6S, but will gladly expand upon it, as your 6S kept popping int my head while out running errands.

The attention to detail without getting excessively wordy or, dare I say it - poetic was fantastic. You clearly wrote for all the senses, which makes it more vivid for the reader (or at least this one).
I also dig how each sentence, in some manner, marks the passing of time - drops become puddles, footprints fade, air turns cool, aromas linger. This is a very nice technique, and subtly ties the composition together.

[Toby Tucker Hecht]

I appreciate your appreciation. This little piece had many iterations and in fact is the end product of at least 6 months (appropriately!!) of mental deliberation.